Title: Scarlet
Genre: General, Angst (Drama-verse)
Characters: Cho Sun, In Soo
Words: 472
Genre: General, Angst (Drama-verse)
Characters: Cho Sun, In Soo
Words: 472
Summary: She is breathtaking in the cold light of dawn.
"She was wearing red, you know, a brilliant scarlet red, just like today, on the day she was brought into our house as a child. Before my father stood a ten-year-old girl, and the fiery red of her robes really… became of her.”
o.o0o.o
You are playing beneath the drooping eaves of a lonely house when you first see her --- a tiny girl-child standing in the dusty courtyard of this imposing place you call home. She is wispy, and not much younger than you, and a bright red rose (red like her lips, red like blood) is plaited into her long black hair. Its fragile petals tremble as she shivers slightly, but whether it is from fear or from the winter’s chill, you do not know. You do not know who she is, why she is here, or whence the wind has blown her from.
…All you know is that she is wild and broken, and breathtaking in the cold light of dawn.
The small, wounded sparrow that you have gripped in your hands struggles feebly, but this time, you let it go, tossing it carelessly on the ground. It squeaks, overjoyed at the sudden freedom, but, bloodied and injured as it is, can only flutter weakly in the dirt, unable to fly away. Normally this would make you smile – you always did like to clip their wings – but today, your attention is turned elsewhere, and you pay it no heed.
But the girl in the courtyard – she does, and her measuring gaze lingers for several breathless moments on the battered animal lying between you. With bated breath you watch her watch it, desperately hoping for those dark eyes to lift and collide with yours.
(...Yet you are spared nothing more than a cursory glance.)
You scowl – does she not know who you are? – but your father arrives before you can march up and show her exactly who it is she had so easily dismissed.
“My lord,” she says, bowing low, bestowing upon him the honour that she so indifferently withheld from you. Gritting your teeth, you can only watch silently as your father tilts her pointed chin up in a merciless grip, his eyes sweeping critically over her thin face and figure.
“…You’ll do,” he grunts, finally releasing her. And then, more impatiently, “Well? Your name, girl?”
The girl bows again, swan-like grace in every move.
“This unworthy one… is called Cho Sun, my lord.” Her voice is demure and ever-so-carefully deferent, but there is a spark of defiance in her hooded, obsidian eyes that refuses to be quenched. It is untameable, and elemental --- and every fibre of your being roars for it to be seized, to be owned, to be possessed. ...Because you – vicious and worldly at twelve years old – denied nothing, yet lacking everything, have never desired anything quite so much.
‘Mine,’ you whisper, as you trace her fragile figure with hungry eyes.
Mine.
The brilliant scarlet of her dress is the sky on fire, leaving scorch-marks on your dead, dead heart.
o.o0o.o
Author's Note:
(Because the character's ages are unclear, I decided to make In Soo a little older than Cho Sun for the purposes of this story, even though she looks a lot older than he does.)
Like? Dislike? Utterly loathe? >_< Comments are love! and constructive criticism is, as always, very appreciated, but please be gentle!
This is my first (and last) Cho Sun + In Soo piece --- the first of my [10 Moments] one-shots (i.e. the '10 Loves For Jae Shin' --- as i.turtle puts it) is in the works. I don't actually know when I'll get it done, but most likely after my exams. It'll be way more light-hearted than this one, though, I promise! =P
I await your evaluation with bated breath. =X
Tofu! This is awesome! You are a really good writer. I love that you changed the color of Chosun's hanbok from blue to scarlet red because it so much more interesting symbolically. And I especially like this line: "Because you – vicious and worldly at twelve years old – denied nothing, yet lacking everything, have never desired anything quite so much." It so perfectly describes the character of In Soo and his obsession with Cho Sun.
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to more!
it's great. it really depicts Ha In Soo so well. please continue with the other casts' fanfic :D of course, if you accept request, i desperately looking for LSJ & KYH fanfic ^^
ReplyDeletethanks ^^
@doozy:
ReplyDeleteLol - 'good' is pushing it =P but I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the encouraging comment!
@tako:
Thanks. =) In re: LSJ&KYH, I shall see what I can do. =P Of course, it all depends on what my muse makes me write so I can't make any promises just yet! XD
it's good..I love it
ReplyDeleteI hope u can write more
thank you
Ms. Tofu!! i love it!!! looking forward to reading the rest of the story... i can say.. i've become your fan.. you write so good.. XD
ReplyDeleteMiss Tofu, you've done it again! This drama verse is as brilliant as your recaps and asides. I hope you'll continue this as I can totally visualize the scene while reading the verse. Your characterization of both characters are on the mark: In Soo's cruelty and his obsession with Chosun already surfacing at a young age and Chosun's indominitable spirit is also captured perfectly. Looking forward to the continuation,
ReplyDeleteYour fan,
Sleepless in Pittsburgh, PA
Wow Tofu, is there anything you CAN'T do? ^0^
ReplyDeleteI do love this, succinct but poetic. Particularly:
"…All you know is that she is wild and broken, and breathtaking in the cold light of dawn."
"..Because you – vicious and worldly at twelve years old – denied nothing, yet lacking everything, have never desired anything quite so much."
"The brilliant scarlet of her dress is the sky on fire, leaving scorch-marks on your dead, dead heart."
While reading, I couldn't help thinking how perfect for NCEA L3 unfamiliar text analysis this is DOH! @@ The symbolism in the colour red, the broken bird, the dawn.. winter. Intentional right?
Concrit? There's not really much I can give. Slightly erring on the side of purply prose, but if you wrote it with poetic intent in mind then it's not a problem.
Thank you for sharing, Tofu. I would love to read more from you.
--<-@ -a rose for Chosun-
Thank you, all, for your kind comments!
ReplyDeleteUnfortunately, I don't plan on writing anymore for Chosun&Insoo (this was just a stand-alone piece that demanded to be written XD) however, I do have quite a few other things planned for the next month or so. =)
I'm not one to write novel-length stories, so all of them will be short stories / one-shots of (usually) less than 1000 words, and on occasion, somewhat longer but probably no more than 5000. x____x Apologies in advance!
@i.turtle:
LOL @NCEA unfamiliar text... ah, good times. =P And yep, it was intentional. XD
Thanks for the concrit --- I totally agree! Purple prose will be the death of me! =P
omg miss tofu...it is so entertaining.plz con tinue with the other ones....and more if you have ideas......i am so excited just by reading one-liners......delightful...
ReplyDeleter u by any chance an avid reader of thomas hardy?
ReplyDeleteTofu!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your help with the ep 19 subs. They've just been released!
Ahh, loved your fanfic, and looking forward to many more to come, I hope.
@silly:
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading! =) 'A Lesson in Irony' is almost complete. I'll post it up soon!
@Anon:
Not really, no. I remember reading 'Tess of D'Urbervilles' as a child (if not the content of the novel lol!) and a handful of his poems ('The Tenebris' comes to mind) but not particularly.
I'm curious, though. Why do you ask? Have I unconsciously/accidentally emulated/plagiarised something from him?
@blue:
AWESOME! =) I look forward to seeing the completed subs. =D
ha! been waiting for fanfics now that the show has ended. thanks, tofu!
ReplyDeletewill you write more? this is really very good!
@iamtired:
ReplyDeleteHi iamtired =) I am tired, too! =P
(*ducks* rotten vegetables and loud BOO-ing*)
Punning aside, thanks for reading and commenting! Indeed, I do have more planned for this month --- see 'Table Of Contents' for my works-in-progress. =D
I hope you will continue to enjoy reading @ Lunar Annals!
I'm breathless with admiration! such imagery and depth (was everything intentional?): Chosun staring at the bird, while Insoo stares at her, willing her to look up at him, underlining their basic diff. in personalities: chosun sympathithizing with the bird and Insoo commanding her obeisance. Bravo!
ReplyDelete@mamajoni:
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading and commenting! =) Haha, indeed, everything is intentional. =P
ha Tofu, many thanks...I was SO HAPPY with the split sec scene btw HIS n CS on ep 20..Reading this is like a closure...I like ur work. maybe u should comply them and then market to the production house for a sequel or Pre-SKKS :P Will be following your 10 little stories...Yes, pls do a little LSJ-KYH too...The drama left me high and dry...So much could be done :)) Take ur time Emma
ReplyDeleteOhmygosh please continue with this. I love it so much, reading it is breathtaking and i love your style, the way the point of view is directed at In Soo. You're amazing and I hope to read more of this story! This is the beginning of HIS and CS's story that I have been waiting for!!
ReplyDelete@Emma:
ReplyDelete=P Haha, thanks! Although my amateurish writing probably isn't fit for marketing. XD Hope you continue to enjoy reading @ Lunar Annals! =D
@Anon:
While I'd love to write more Cho Sun+In Soo, unfortunately, I'm out of inspiration! If my Muse hits again, then I promise I'll continue. =D
An eloquent background to the In Soo/Cho Sun relationship.
ReplyDeleteCan we have a backstory for Yong Ha and Jae Shin, please? :)
@Min:
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading and commenting!
If inspiration hits, I shall definitely do so! =)